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Summer project-Writing a novel!!!! UPDATED 5/20

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Summer project-Writing a novel!!!! UPDATED 5/20

#171447 Posted on 2018-05-22 15:42:17

Hi,
Wow, That is really good. I like it so far.


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#171448 Posted on 2018-05-22 15:46:29

Thanks Cherry! :D


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#171486 Posted on 2018-05-23 08:44:56

I would try to vary your sentence lengths; in the prologue they are all quite similar in length (I do the exact same thing - it’s quite hard to avoid it if you aren’t consciously trying to). Having sentences the same length can make the prose sound robotic. Varying the perspective is called ‘split narrative’, and is quite a sophisticated writing technique; I would definitely give it a try! If it doesn’t work out you can always rewrite it :).  Otherwise, this is coming out very well! I feel like I can see everything you are describing like it’s playing out in front of me.

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#171519 Posted on 2018-05-23 16:08:42

Thanks for the feedback, Io! Didn't realize that, thanks haha. 
Working on some more of it now. Bit of slow going since I'm super busy but summer's just around the corner!!


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