Unicorn Foal Lineart, Critique Please! [Updates]

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So the other day I was playing around with my wacom pen and created this, it was made on FireAlpaca. (I'm not sure why the lines are showing up so grainy). Anyways, I am looking for any critique on this. I may or may not be colouring this, as I am in a lineart mood lately, lol. Any critique appreciated, and also would any one be interested in buying this lineart?

- Thanks guys ;)

Last edited on 2017-09-16 at 06:55:07 by 🌙 Io

^{I think it's a good start, the cheek could be further forward and the forelegs a bit thinner, but it's pretty decent basic anatomy aside from those things. As a lineart I personally wouldn't use it, it's not quite cartoony (certainly not realistic heh) and fairly basic, the outline isn't consistent in thickness, wobbly in some places i.e the neck, and it's more sketchy than clean. If it was redrawn (or redlined) I'm sure you'd make a great improvement.}

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So I tried again to tidy up the lines a bit, keeping in mind what maple said (Thanks!).
I will probably try another version tomorrow and keep updating ;)


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Another update ;)

Last edited on 2017-09-15 at 10:02:56 by 🌙 Io

I think it looks great! Maybe you could move the eye a bit further forward. I like the horn :)

Thanks Pegasus!

Here is a greyscale on those lines - any thoughts anyone? :)

I like it! Another anatomy thing, maybe make the poll (right behind the ears) a little less tall, and fill out the top of the neck and back a bit more? It's really good though!