So I'm writing a story!

Yeah I have always been into writing but here is the characters first! Oh and by the way it's about werewolves! Sorry if some of this offends you I like my characters being emo/Gothic you know! Sorry it's a bit long! I'll post the story later if ya'll want to read it!

Ash- Emo girl with black hair and icy blue eyes. Stubborn, determined, shy, hardworking, and she has trouble with her parents they abused her and never really cared for her so she is used to being on her own. She grew up being abused by both her parents and her brother tried killing her twice. She finally had enough the day her father hit her and knocked her out for a few minutes. She turned into Luna and jumped him killing him. Once her mother realized what she had done her mother kicked her out. Ash has a mind of her own she will speak her mind with no trouble at all.  Likes- the woods, the smell of pine trees, the sound water makes when you walk in it, music(when in human form),video games(also when in human form),  cars, animals, and last but not least she loves drawing and painting in fact anything to do with art.  Dislikes- people judging her because she’s emo, the cold, people asking her to turn down her music, people, anxiety attacks(which she gets mainly at night due to the nightmares she has every night),and crowded places to many people.
 
Luna- Ash’s wolf. Midnight black with the same icy blue eyes. Vicious she is a cold blooded killer once you are on her bad side. She is strong spirited and is not afraid to put you in your place very quickly. She has a bunch of scars from Ash’s parents and from her brother. Luna has a huge scar from the top of her head to the tip of her muzzle from where her brother tried to kill her all because she yelled at him for hitting her.
 
Xavier- Gothic boy with brown hair and blue eyes due to him being blind. He is almost always in wolf form so he can see. Ash’s soon to be mate. Strong, intelligent, determined, and has been kicked out of his pack for being who he is and for saving a prisoner who he thought was his mate but turned out she used him to get out of the dungeon.  Once realizing what she did he was no longer interested in love and he locked himself out from the outside world. He doesn’t care about anyone or anything if you meant something to him before well you don’t now. Well at least he doesn’t want you to know he cares even if it’s a little bit. Likes- explosions, likes the sound of cars revving (would like cars but have never seen one due to being blind), the smell of fresh air, water, music, singing. Dislikes- When people stare at him or thinks he needs help because he’s blind, the way people act around him when he falls and how they all freak out and try to help him up HE IS PERFECTLY CAPABLE OF GETTING UP ON HIS OWN!), when people use him being blind as an excuse that he can’t do something, and anything to do with a lot of people.
 

Titan- Xavier’s wolf who is a grey wolf that has some black points with greenish blueish eyes. He has a bad attitude but still cares even if it is just a little bit. Titan is aggressive and you get one his bad side it’ll be the last thing you do garneted. He has had a hard life and a rough start to it as well. While being born his mother died and his father never forgave him and so they never really got along but his father never did abuse him or anything and still took care of him but they were never really close. 

Last edited on 2017-07-28 at 21:09:32 by Eclipse Moon Stables

Ooooh! Writing a book is always exciting! 

A quick, unsolicited tip: Planning out your story on a simple story arc is extremely helpful, also having friends you can brainstorm with can really help.

I took a creative writing class in middle school and we had this major project at the end of the trimester where we all got into groups and would do something related to creative writing. I was always in the fiction team and it was the best because my group almost always consisted of the really shy, quiet girl who never spoke during class who also knew about a lot of historical stuff and would help out with at accuracy of the characters. Then there was the weird guy who wears really loud shirts, and he was the guy you consulted when you wanted to kill off a character. They are both amazing writers and I have some very interesting stories from that class. And they also helped me write at least two stories that are on my wattpad account (Skie and The Lasine Clan).

Awesome thanks for the feedback I appreciate it! I'm still working on the story and it's going quite smooth! This is by far my favorite book I've wrote yet! Here's the story as of right now if you want to check it out! Let me know what you think!!





Emo idiot was the last thing I heard my mother say before running out the door. I killed him I actually killed him but I’m not sorry one bit. He deserved every bit of that my father or not! Yes I killed my father he freighted me after hitting me across the face! My mother’s words found its way back in my mind as I continued to run. Please Ash let me out I can handle these guys please I’ll run faster and I won’t cause any more trouble, you can’t keep me locked up much longer! “Luna not now okay you have done enough today YOU’RE the reason I got kicked out of the pack you know that?” Please Ash these guards aren’t going to give up that fast and they have changed please I can out run them come on! “Fine” I said while changing. Once I was Luna I ran the other way forcing my legs as far as they could carry me. I stopped at a little pond and switched back luckily I change with my clothes still on. After taking a few sips of the water I found a tree to climb and sleep in. Once up the tree I laid there not wanting to go to sleep. I heard footsteps and slowly and oh so quietly got up and looked down. Seeing a brown wolf appear scared her. It’s the guards lay back down they wouldn’t see us but they can smell us but they will think we just passed through here. “Okay Luna” I whispered as I got down and listened to the footsteps and wondered if they found me. Everything was quiet and that’s when I was grabbed. I twisted and turned trying to get out of this strangers grip but it didn’t work. “Shh. I’m helping you be quiet!” the voice said and I did just that.
 
 
Xavier’s POV
She fought but once I told her what I was doing she stopped. I brought her to safety wondering what see thought I was. “Hey I’m sorry to have just grabbed you like that but I didn’t know what else to do I was in wolf form when I saw three Midnight Pack guards and you in a tree!” “What were you doing on a tree?” I had so many questions was she a murderer I mean it took a lot to get guards to chase you that far from their territory! What did she do was she from the Midnight Pack or is she from another and was caught on their turf? Is she a rouge man there was so much I could ask her right now but I had decided not to! Did she notice I was blind would she make fun of me to like all the other’s did? So many things I wanted to know was cut off when Titan said “mate” “No Titan I don’t even know her “I said through mind link “Now please stop I gave up on that a while ago and you k now that I can’t even see her for crying out loud!” Look I know it’s a lot to take in but she is your mate the moon Goddess chose her but if you don’t want her you can reject her but it causes a lot of pain so be prepared!”  
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Luna cried out mate! “No Luna not our mate I don’t even know him so stop” I said through mind link so he can’t hear me. I looked at him and said “Thanks and well um... I killed my father the alpha male of the Midnight Pack he abused me and this time it costed him his life but don’t worry I won’t hurt you because I need to get out of here” I said not realizing I was giving him an attitude. Um… I just saved your life no need to give me an attitude! “Oh sorry I didn’t realize I was giving you one I have been through a lot and I don’t like people now if you’ll excuse me I have to go!” Don’t leave him alone he’ll die he’s blind he can’t see anything you can’t just leave him here. “Luna if he got me out of danger without getting himself killed I’m sure he’s just fine you just don’t want me to leave him because you think we are mates but were not” I shot back through mind link. “Good bye” I said while shifting into my human form.
 
 
Xavier’s POV
 
“That’s fine I understand” I said as I switched to human form. We ran here in wolf so we could get away faster but I grabbed her out the tree in human of course. I could hear her walking away “wait what’s your name and do you have a place to stay?” She walked back and said I’m Ash and no I don’t but I’m going to find one. “Oh um… okay I have a place you can stay I am the Alpha of the Dark Crystal Pack, I have a pretty large house and it has a complete house upstairs that you can live in if you want of course!” Did I just offer my rival to live with me what is wrong with me? She could kill me and I am letting her stay in my house! Would you mind if I did stay with you she asked. “Um… of course not I mean… umm well there are going to be rules and my pack may not like the idea but yeah why not!”
 
Ash’s POV
 
Did he just let me stay in his house? “Um… thanks oh and I’ll have to warn you I have bad nightmares at night!” That’s fine I have them too he said politely. “Really so you won’t mind and I’m sorry to hear that!” Amit it you like him come on he’s cute Luna said amused by how nice I was being to him. No I won’t mind and can you turn into human form for me so I can see what you look like because I’m blind in my human form he asked. “Sure I don’t mind and I’m sorry to hear that” I said hearing Luna laugh. “Shut up Luna” I shot back in mind link hoping she would stop with this whole mate thing! She changed and saw Xavier eyes widen. Blushing she said “what is something wrong?”
 
 
Xavier’s POV
“No um… you’re really pretty sorry I don’t know what I just said haha I’m just not used to seeing people or anything for that matter!” She smiled and said its okay and thanks I get told that a lot. Man I wanted to be the first to tell her that!  See I told you that you were mates! “Shut up Titan” I told my wolf through mind link before changing into my human form. Wishing I could see her reaction I asked “Since I’ve never seen myself what do I look like?”
 
 
Ash’s POV
Really cute Luna said and I growled at her though mind link. “You have brown hair and blue eyes I can tell your Gothic as well- just admit it you like him Luna cut me off from finishing my sentence. “Would you shut up Luna” I said before I could say anything else she said not until you admit you like him even just a little bit! I sighed “I’m so tired haha so where is this house of yours?” He changed back to wolf form and trotted towards his house leading her towards the unknown. She looked around and saw that his wolf was limping. “Are you hurt” I found myself worrying. No he said coldly trying to hide the pain. “What happened?”
 
 
Xavier’s POV


She seemed worried I didn’t know what to say. “Umm… I’ll be fine I promise you know how fast we heal!” Xavier let me see she yelled. “Okay, okay fine here see it’s not bad!” We stopped so she could see it and adult that time my beta came in his Ford pickup! Do you need a ride he asked and I nodded my head and changed into human form. He helped me in the truck as I got in the front Ash got in the back and shortly fell asleep. She soon woke a little before we reached the territory and I warned her to be on the lookout for her fellow pack members! She was staring out the window the moonlight making her eyes pop out and I smiled “are you nervous?” A little she said sounding way nervous then a little bit! “Don’t be this pack is sweet they’ll accept you no matter what. She smiled and gasped as the house came into view.
 
Ash’s POV
“Wow this is your house” I said gasping in shock. It was the biggest house I have ever seen. I frowned at the thought that Xavier has never seen his house. “Sorry for asking but how do you get around?” I stay down stairs where I know where everything is “oh I get it so you are used to where everything is right?” Yes exactly “cool I mean it’s not cool your blind but cool that you know where everything is!” Once the car stopped and we all got out. I reached for my stuff but was pushed out the way by the beta I got it he said. “Oh thanks I guess” I said Luna was beginning to become restless. “Do you think that I can live here for… a while I’m scared to go back home?” He nodded his head and I took a breath of relive. Your welcome to anything in the house just if you move something put it back where it was please haha. “Oh of course thanks by the way umm I’m going to go take a shower is that okay?” Sure go ahead he said as I walked up stairs and as I opened the door I found myself gasping this house was amazing! The bathroom had two sinks, a huge shower, a tub, and a closet! I opened the closet all that was in there were a bunch of towels and some shampoo and conditioner. I turned on the hot water and stepped in letting the water go down my back. Once I was done I dried and put on some pajama pants and a black tank top. Walking into the kitchen I said “well I’m going to bed now oh wait I haven’t even seen my room yet hahaha!” He led me upstairs to a huge room. It was all black and white and it was amazing looking. The bed was a king size and it had a nightstand. The closet was huge but yet the room still had a dresser! I haven’t felt so privileged in well… forever. “Thanks for everything “I said hugging him. You welcome he said smiling I ran and jumped on my bed and I sunk in it! I soon found myself asleep.
Xavier’s POV

She walked upstairs and left and I sat down on the sofa and fell asleep there not meaning to!

Last edited on 2017-07-28 at 22:13:06 by Eclipse Moon Stables

Do you have a google account or wattpad? Because it would be much easier to do suggestions on a google docs.

Yes I do have a Wattpad account!

WOWWWWWWWWWWWW And who exactly are you referring to as 'Luna'? >:)


I lost myself. I'm laughing and crying at the same time and I can't even .

I'm done LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL

(I have no idea what's going on.)

XD do you like it though??

The grammar & punctuation could be better, but I love to read, and If I don't like a book, I will start a mob! XD (You probably don't want to know what I did that one time...) And yes, I like the story. It's pretty noice! (I also feel like changing my name :P)

Last edited on 2017-07-29 at 12:43:18 by Luna Soxie Fox

Hahaha I'm sorry if you want me to change it I will!!